Re write sales tex for a brochure

the product we are selling is a hightech multi dimmentional display, the orignal text created describes the product quite well and we like the text, but we are looking for a more international sales text, more fresh in style, more sales orientated.

the text should be more US or UK style language.

the text should not exceed the curent length if possible.

the target group for this brochure are mainly marketing people

Thanks