Copywriting: re-write website home page (as a trail for the whole site)

I run an IT business. I want to target creative companies (designers, creative agencies etc). My site is too "techie" and needs to be re-written so that it appeals to this kind of business. Please have a look at some creative agency and design websites so you see what I mean.
In essence: the content must not be technical! It must appeal to creative types who will switch off the second they read about viruses or anything techie!
As a trial, I want to get a sample of what you can do so I have attached a page that I want to be "de-techified".
Please contact me to discuss this further.