I need rewriting / editing of a 2,500 word news article

Num. of words: 2500
Industry: Healthcare
Topic: An entrepreneur's bio
Tone: Witty/Sharp
Extensive research needed: no
Extra notes: The article will be published in a professional management journal. We require re-writing around 40% of the article to improve flow and editing the rest. And of course an overall proof read.

here is a sample text:
"With such a lofty goal, although one he believes is achievable, dedication from every employee at the group is something that is extremely important. The key value at the company, he says, is dedication to healthcare and making the world a better place. This means that everyone who works at the group is dedicated to this concept, to patient care, and to improving healthcare around the world.