Rewrite 500 Word Essay

I need my existing essay—currently under 500 words—rewritten for stronger clarity, coherence, and impact. The core ideas are sound, but the flow feels uneven and several passages read awkwardly. I’d like you to:

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Please preserve every key point and supporting fact, but feel free to reorganize sentences or reorder sections if it improves readability. When you deliver, provide two files: one clean final version and one with tracked changes so I can see exactly what was modified.