Editing and proof reading financial article for professional purposes

Ouch! Never quote lyrics of songs, Lee, unless you've been given 'kind permission' by the owner of the copyright (maybe Jones, but could've been Strummer, then again, likely a combined effort). The track isn't yet in the public domain, won't be for many years, therefore the word 'title' rather than 'lyrics' is a better choice for this classic Clash track.

That aside, I would mirror Mike in his observations. Who is your audience? I would also add, £20 is somewhat frugal if you require a decent job to elevate your presence on site. Just a thought.

Kind regards.

Wendy

Hi Lee,
I have taken a quick look at the opening section of your document. My first question would be who are you intending to address with the piece? If it is for a relatively unsophisticated audience, the style may fit, but I doubt it would strike a chord with professionals with significant pension funds as it is too informal. If this is the case, I could re-write the piece for you in a more authoritative style, using the information you provide - but I wouldn't be doing this for anything like £20! Ultimately, it depends on the value to you of the document on-site as to whether the investment is worthwhile or not (by the way, if you start as you have, you really ought to allude to The Clash!).

Mike

Hi Lee,

I will proofread and edit this document for you for £20.
Let me know.

Thank you
Fiza

Have you got a deadline for this?

Best wishes

Rebekah