Sales Emails

UK PPH MEMBERS ONLY NEED APPLY PLEASE

Please see attached copy which includes an initial first email together with two variations of a follow up email - one of which is generic for all industries and the other has been written to suit the healthcare sector.

I would like someone who has a sales copywriting background to take a look at these and copy-edit the content where required and make them more engaging if possible. I don't think there's much that can be achieved with the first email as it needs to remain very much to the point. The follow-up's however are quite wordy and I'm wondering if they should be more punchy.

In addition to the above, I would also like two further (much shorter) follow-up emails written. To clarify, that's two for generic and two for healthcare prospects. These are to be sent to those who have not responded to the previous emails.