Email writing for 20 year anniversary - Business

Hi
We have designed a very simple email shot to go out to our customers to inform them that our company is 20 years old, We have written the email and designed it but looking for somebody to check it and change it if they think it would read better in another way by vhanging format words etc (we think it needs a pro touch)
Can send the email we have designed to interested parties to quote if needed,