One hour work - Editing a query letter and a short synopsis

Num. of words: 1800
Industry: Publishing/Journalism
Topic: Publishing fiction
Tone: Witty/Sharp
Extensive research needed: no
Extra notes: I want to send out my book to a couple publishers and need a little help in boosting up my query letter and short synopsis.

The query letter (499-word) and the short synopsis (1280-word) are ready - and were composed by my humble self - but it lacks something. Some catchy phrases, something that hooks the literary agents because I wanna hit home run with it. ;)

Could someone help me in that ? That'd be a one-hour work.

If yes, please let us do a selection by replying to my ad: who writes the most convincing application, he/she is the winner. :D

Thanks guys,
Dave