Existing website copy edited and updated with SEO

Num. of words: 1300
Industry: Healthcare
Topic: about us
Tone: Colloquial
Outline & Structure: I have attempted to write the following pages for a new website

About Us
Our Story
Why Us
FAQ's
Loyalty Rewards
Become an affiliate salon

for a new business focusing on hair extensions for black women aged 18 - 40 who want natural quality hair extensions. There is also a B2B element with wanting to recruit salons to become partners to sell our products and services.

Each section is pretty short around 200 - 300 words. But I need to make sure each section builds trust, creates desire, shows clients the current problem and our solution and incorporates our keywords. We also need headings and stand out quotes on some pages. Basically we just need killer copy that will rank with google and will engage our clients causing them to buy!!
Extensive research needed: no
Extra notes: We are on a pretty tight schedule and would need to work completed by Monday the 16th.

Please find attached my attempts, this is an example of what you will be working with. But I need it improved and drastically!