LinkedIn Pulse article about retailing and Millennials

Num. of articles: 1
Information for the blog/website: We provide retail software to speciality retailers - www.cegid.com/uk
Industry: Technology
Topic: Retailing to Millennials - what retailers need to know
Tone: Informal/Casual
Outline & Structure: I've already starting writing this article so I just need someone to review, refine and finish it off. The article will be used for my LinkedIn Pulse account and will be seen by a number of global retail brands like Cartier, GANT, Estee Lauder etc. I work for a retail software company that provides point of sale and stock management software. The purpose of this article is to help me gain credibility with these brands so when I reach out to them, they see me as a retail expert. I've already started writing the article so please review the attached Word doc as this gives you a flavour of the tone and more insight into the topic.
Extensive research needed: no
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