We need a crowdfund pitch and video script.

We have written a draft crowdfunding pitch and video script. We believe the crowdfund pitch can be shorter and more impactful and we would welcome feedback on the video script.

Our Muslim marriage brand is the only certified social enterprise matrimonial brand in the UK. We have checked other social enterprise bodies in USA/Canada/Aus and we haven't found any similar marriage companies listed.

Would it be fair to say that we are the world's first certified social enterprise Muslim marriage service?

That would make our pitch very impactful.