Written Pitch for my new web business

I am starting my own usability business and am going to take the approach of sending a 'Written pitch' to my contacts. I would like to be able to provide a freelancer with my current version and ask them to turn it into a promoting and encouraging 'pitch' for business because it is currently reading a bit too much like a CV. The document will be no longer than 2 pages and is 'almost' there as my writing isn't too bad when I put my mind to it, but it does need some work. Please send quotes.